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[Closed] help of the grammar brigade

 juan
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Can I use the word eager in an application letter?
"
Furthermore, I do believe I can be an asset to your team, and I am eager to learn more skills in the field of cheminformatics.
Yours sincerely,

"

Cheers


 
Posted : 24/02/2010 9:45 pm
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As a practising grammar nazi, I'd say it's fine.


 
Posted : 24/02/2010 9:49 pm
 juan
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Cheers very much appreciated ๐Ÿ˜€


 
Posted : 24/02/2010 9:50 pm
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Your thread should have started with "Help of the....". The capital H would indicate the start of your statement/question. ๐Ÿ˜‰

On another note, I'd remove the "I do believe I can be" and replace it with "I am sure I would be".

Bonne chance, mon vieux!


 
Posted : 24/02/2010 9:52 pm
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No comma before the "and" though.....


 
Posted : 24/02/2010 9:52 pm
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You could get rid of the "do" and the 2nd comma for me

(and cheminformatics is a made-up word, surely they'll look it up & catch you out ?!) ๐Ÿ˜‰


 
Posted : 24/02/2010 9:52 pm
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No comma before the "and" though.....


 
Posted : 24/02/2010 9:53 pm
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No comma before the "and" though.....


 
Posted : 24/02/2010 9:56 pm
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๐Ÿ˜€


 
Posted : 24/02/2010 10:04 pm
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I'd say [i]keep[/i] the comma before the 'and', and remove the 'I' immediately after it. That will make for a perfectly shaped, well-punctuated sentence.

Let's hear it for the Oxford comma.


 
Posted : 24/02/2010 10:09 pm