two dots above an e, help!
Thanks guys, for your help you can proof-read my letter so far (its an internally advertised job): All facts within are 100% true:
I am writing to apply for the Brontë House Tutor Post, as I believe that I have the experience, character and skills necessary to undertake this role successfully. Having been busy writing UCAS references and reading students’ personal statements for some time now, I hope you will forgive me if this letter adopts a certain style… [All facts and opinions offered henceforth are true and genuine].
Since a very young age I have been a proponent of a strong House system within schools, especially since I served as House Captain of Peng Chau House for the academic year 1981-82, in my final year at Bradbury Junior School in Hong Kong. This was the crowning glory of my exemplary primary education, and some say that this was in fact my finest achievement to date. After serving out this duty with dignity and honour I started life at Island School, where I joined Einstein House – the purple house, and indeed my time at this school can be viewed in retrospect as one long ‘purple patch’. Inevitably, when the time came, I was duly appointed House Prefect with responsibility to nurture and inspire the younger students.This gave me the opportunity for me to show my passion for, and deep fascination with the House system. I already have in my mind’s eye the kind of Head of House that I want to be: just like Mr Cabrelli, the moustachioed Italian-Scot who was the Head of Einstein (which can sound strange when taken out of context) for my time at Island School.
I fear that given I have only got as far aged 17, and I were to continue on in this manner, this could be a very long letter of application. Suffice it to say [that’s as far as I’ve got so far]
Would you give me the job??Posted 5 years ago
bit pompous – will they go for that ?
It’s meant to be tongue in cheek, the format hasn’t quite copied across right from the original which doesn’t help – sixth formers are always putting in their uni applications how they’ve been fascinated in molecular bio-chemistry since they were 2, and the such-like.Posted 5 years ago
Very Marmite. Very late nineteenth century literature…
You know the people who will look at this. We don’t.
“Suffice it to say” is a totally redundant and possibly alienating expression. Not sure I have ever agreed with anything I have ever seen Edukator post before… But he’s right. Surely you’ve got to grab them in the first 200 words in a simple effective and impressive manner?Posted 5 years ago
Points taken and duly noted.Posted 5 years ago
The thing is, the Head appointed me to the teaching post I’ve been in for the last 5 years and also promoted me a year ago when I applied for an extra responsibility, so he knows all about me already, and it seems rather trite to go over all of that again. Speaking to the Head’s PA at the end of the school day today, only one other person that she knows of has shown interest and the deadline is tomorrow, so I should get an interview, where I can make my case my seriously. The letter after that ^^^ does get serious and being a grammar school, they love a bit of pomp round here! Anyways, I won’t be reporting back when it falls flat and I don’t get an interview. Cheers, off to do some marking now.
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